There might be some people who believe that people whose rooms are organized and neat is not relative to be successful keeping one's room organized and neat is irrelevant from one's success. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for the two subsequent reason. First, habits to keep of keeping the room clean help people improve their academic performance. Second, messy rooms make people be under a lot of stress.
First of all, when people clean the room regularly, it will help them improve their academinc academic performance. Cleaning the room regularly requires people to be diligent and self-diciplined self-disciplined. When these personal traits are developed, it is likely to bring a better result in school or society. For example, when my sister did poorly in elementary school, she got distracted easily, procrastinated, and acted on impulse. Howerever However, she has changed a little by cleaning the her room regularly. (띄어쓰기) She realized that her diligent and changed habits helped her keep up with the work in class. Naturally, she started to maintain the good behavior by raising to raise her grades in school. Without habits of cleaning the room regularly, she would have fallen behind.
On top of that, messy rooms can create a lot of stress. Most people today are under a lot of pressure and stress due to the competitive society. If they are living in the a messy room, they would get more stressed. which makes people give up easily. According to the study conducted by Seoul University in 2014, 80% of respondents who successed succeeded in the business said that one of the most important personal traits about success is diligently doing something regularly. This is due to the fact that doing something regularly helps people improve their habits (improve와 habit은 의미가 잘 어울리지가 않네요) and have a chance to have the opportunity to achieve success.
In conclusion, habits of doing something regularly such as keeping the room clean help people improve their personal traits. and Also, messy rooms make people get more stress. (띄어쓰기) In these regard, I firmly believe that people whose rooms are organized and neat tends are more likely to be successful.
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