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It is controversial weather whether (weather은 날씨입니다!) Sucralose causes health problems.
In the reading passage, the writer proposes that the substance is the cause of
diverse diseases. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several points
which that prove consuming sucralose is not hazardous.
First, the lecturer insists that diabetes is not caused by
consuming the sucralose. Other factors like starch and rice can influence the
increase of insulin which cause the disease. Also, the problems of diet soda
are not because of sucralose but because people is are overweight and they are
likely to have obesity. The physical condition can be caused of by diabetes. This
casts doubt on the reading passage that sucralose results in diabetes by
increasing the level of insulin and making resistance against insulin.
Second, the lecturer contends that the sucralose does not
contain any harmful substance which leads to cancer even when it heats.
According to experiment, when sucralose's temperature increases, the element is
almost similar to a normal situation. This counters the reading passage's
assertion that the sucralose produces toxic materials when it cooked.
Finally, the speaker argues that there is no evidence to
prove that consuming sucralose gives rise to allergic reactions. This is because
respondents' accounts which told the side effects are not reliable. Their
imagination can be affected by other factors like media since a test shows that
consuming the substance is safe. This refutes the reading passage's arguments
that severe allergic reactions is are due to eating sucralose.
Writing 0-30 Score Scale Good (24-30) Overall Comment: 포인트도 잘 잡아주셨고, 흐름도 좋습니다. 하지만 작은 문법 실수들이 많이 보여서 수정을 해드렸습니다.
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