There has been a heated debate over the issue of whether communicating in person is better than writing rough emails in order to do a project. Some people might agree with for the statement and have with their own reasons. However, I disagree with the argument because today's students are surely busy and most of them have their own electronic devices that enable them to use the Internet.
First of all, communicating in person leaves students with not enough time to do other works. As our society become faster-changing and more competitive, students have to deal with lots a lot of works in order to get ahead. As a consequence, communicating in person in order to do a project makes them feel burden because when they may have tight schedules. However, they can save a lot of energy and time by using emails. Given this, it is not an overstatement to argue that it is better for today's students to communicate through rough emails than in person. In my case, I was up to my neck in my study and felt tense at work throughout the day one day last year. Especially, group projects in my economic course economy class was terrible at first because I should had to spend a large amount of time communicating with my colleagues in person. However, after we decided to communicate by email, I could have spare time to do other works and relax to recharge myself batteries. From this point of view, communicating by email is the better way to do a project than in person.
Additionally, advanced technologies enable students to use email to communicate easily and precisely. Nowadays, most of students have their own smart phones, tablet computers, or laptops. Such electronics provide them with easy and precise communication with each other, as communication in person does. Thus, when these electronics are well used, it is likely to help them to bring a good result in a project. Specifically, the a Korean daily podcast indicated that nearly eighty-five percent of the surveyed university students felt that they could successfully understand their colleagues even though they used emails because of the advanced skills that smart phones offer. Moreover, there is a substantial rise in the number of students who have certificates with regards to qualification for computer presentation skills, which makes them communicate well by emails.
All in all, the advantages of communicating by emails far outweigh those of it the in-person communication. Therefore, I firmly believe that communicating by emails is preferable to it communicating in person when students do a group project.
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