It is often said that students should learn the ideas, trends and concepts that help understand certain facts before they study the facts. This make sense because sophisticated and professional knowledge of a field cannot be absorbed without understanding fundamental concepts in the field. Science Scientific subjects like such as (예시나 명단을 들기 위해 like를 쓰는 것은 구어체 표현입니다.) mathematics are typical examples. However, in some subjects like music that need creativity, pre-acquired knowledge can be a disability.
To begin with, imagine that students study mathematics without basic concepts. To be specific, is it possible that a student who have never learned a concept of multiplication figures calculus out? Would it be possible to figure calculus out for a student who have never learned a concept of multiplication? Nobody answers that it is possible. The answer would be no. This is because that theories, concepts and ideas in science is are based on older theories and concepts that were provided established earlier. In fact, secondary schools teach old concepts and higher educational institutions like universities teach relatively new concepts.
In contrast, art classes do not have to provide the systematic curriculum mentioned above. This is because art is a field where artists should appear express their creativity. Pre-absorbed expertise can impede the creative work. A story of a couple of fine artists is famous an example. Each style of two artists was admired in their field. However, after they were full in love, their different characteristics became similar. This is because one learned another's unique skills. As the result, they lost their reputations and their works could not have as high value as before they met.
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주어진 주제(fact 뿐만 아니라 그와 관련된 ideas, trends, concepts도 가르쳐야 한다)에 대한 찬반 입장을 정한 뒤 그 입장에 대한 근거를 대세요. 이 글의 세 번째 문단은 반대 입장도 아니고 'ideas, trends, concepts that help explain those facts'라는 문제 내용과 관련 없는 이야기만 합니다.
또, 적절한 결론으로 글을 마무리 해주세요. 특별히 쓰기가 어려우면 주장을 요약하고 제시한 각 point를 한 줄 정도씩 paraphrase하는 것만으로도 그럴듯한 결론을 쓸 수 있습니다.