To begin with, people nowadays have a lot of media, which was unthinkable in the past. To explain, Internet makes process of sharing faster. Also, social media like facebook and youtube allow frequent exchange of opinions, ideas and information within a period of time. When our grandparents were kids, they only had textbook knowledge and their views were so narrow without the help of Internet. A survey was conducted by UCLA's research department. The survey participants were composed of one hundred people in their sixty. They were asked
On top of that, people can gain many experience easily compared to the past. To be specific, at present, there are many type of fast transportation such as bus or high-speed train like KTX. So, if people want to go anywhere, they will always go that place easily and quickly. By moving quickly, they can go many place in a short period of time. Thus, people not only attain many experience but also broaden their perspective. When my grandparents were young, there was no such high-speed train. So, if they wanted to go to Seoul from Busan, they spent ten hours in the train. However, KTX, the fastest train in Korea, was developed five years ago. Thus, when I go to Seoul from Busan nowadays, it take only 50 minutes. With the help of KTX, I was able to meet my grandparents more easily and frequently, and I was able to make stronger relationship with my grandparents.
On the whole, I believe I accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter with two concrete reasons and evidences. To sum up, people can gain information easily and go to anywhere quickly compared to the past. In this regard, life is more relaxed and comfortable relative to the past.
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