Some people argue that it is required for parents to spend a significant amount of time with their children by doing homework with them. However, in my opinion, this perspective is not true for two following reasons which I am going to elaborate. One reasons is that children can reduce their stress when they play games or sports with their parents. Another reason is that children and parents can gain a lot of experience together by playing sports together.
To begin with, there is no better way for children to relieve stress than playing games or sports with their parents. To explain, children living these days always have to compete with their peers to seize limited opportunities provided by their schools. It can cause a lot of stress to children, and it is really harmful not only mentally but also physically. So they highly need to have the outlet for stress that has a meaning in itself. Thus, by doing sports with their parents rather than homework, children can get rid of stress they get. A survey was conducted by UCLA's research department to determine whether stress could affect children's grades. The survey participants were composed of one hundred children at Gangnam Elementary School, and they were divided two groups. The first group played soccer with their parents every day for one month, while the other group did assignments with their parents every night for a month. The researchers compared the outcomes and recorded that the former group was able to achieve higher grades then the latter. The reason was that they can reduce their stress everyday so they can easily concentrate on their study in the school. This study demonstrates that it is more important for children to play sports than do home assignment with their parents.
On top of that, as far as the variety of experiences is concerned, playing sports with parents can be more helpful to children. In detail,
On the whole, I believe I accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter. To sum up, by doing games or sports with their parents, children can reduce their stress and gain many experience. In this regard I think it is better to play games or sports than do homework with parents.
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