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Some people think that giving good salaries to faculty members can not help build the quality of education up. (What does it mean?) However, in my opinion, it is helpful to develop the quality of classes for two reasons. First, If schools give a higher pay to their professors, it will motivate them to give their classes better education to students al quality than before. Moreover, Universities can have the chances to gather very skilled professors. Firstly, faculty members would be motivated to make high quality of classes, if they get more money. It goes without saying that students should get good teaching from their teachers.
great classes rather than poor classes. To be specific, if schools pay higher salaries to them, our students can have the opportunities to take the lecture which is very organized. For example, A recent study conducted by Education Departmetn in the US showed that 57 percent of the professors who gave her or his opinion about "What motivates for hard working is motivating
you to work hard ? " in the study said that getting higher pay push them to make high quality of education for their students. (Need concluding sentence) On top of that, it helps universities form component faculty members to give higher wages. (Unclear thesis) Even though greater mind does not care about only money, it is the fact that the one of triggers is money for working (Explain more) whatever we do. In detailed, by announcing that a school will provide the positions which is only for professors with significant wages, there will be competition among professors to get these positions. As a result, the college can pick the most component professors up. And I think they develop the quality of education. (Unfortunately, all sentences are unclear) To sum up, I strongly believe that providing good wages to professors can improve educational quality. This is because it motivates them to make nicer lectures and helps universities have greater faculty line-ups.
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