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Some people think that having meals together is not important to families. However, in my opinion, families today should eat together for two reasons. First, we can improve family ties by getting together for meals. Moreover, we can teach our children table manners. First and foremost, having meals together helps strengthen relationship between families. There were more opportunities to have dinner together for families in the past in comparison to these days. This is because of the hectic nature of modern life. (Better mention condition in the past) In addition, it gives rise to form weak bonds between families. For instance, a few years ago, I felt somewhat isolated from my family. It was way hard for us to have family dinners together because, in that time, I was busy with my school and my parents were busy with their work. After that time, fortunately, we all decided to get together for dinner every evening. (Why suddenly?) As a result, it worked out, I meant there were more chance to communicate one another and we could build our ties up. On top of that, by eating together, we can give our kids the tips of table manners. As anyone can see, it is very conventional for children to learn how to use a knife, spoon and fork while their parents teach them dinning etiquette. But, our children nowadays do not know are learning table manners less than in the past due to today's busy life-style. A recent study conducted by Seoul National University showed that 56 percent of youth today lack table manners. The study found that the main problem of this thing of factors was that they had less time together, even in dinner time family dinning. The same study revealed that those who usually had meals with their families was were more likely to have good etiquette and greater table manners. To sum up, getting together for meals helps build family ties up and provides kids with chances to learn about table manners. All things considered, I strongly believe that families today should have meals together.
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- table manner라는 idea는 신선하였습니다. - 각 예시는 thesis와 연결하여 연관성을 높여주시는 것이 좋습니다. - 갑작스럽게 상황이 전개되는 예시는 설득력이 미흡해 보일 수 밖에 없습니다.
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