▶ Your Answer :
The lecturer objects the facts
mentioned in the reading passage made about using a combination of mirrors.
The speaker states that the
claim in the passage have issues.
First, the lecturer claims that the
assertion related to curved mirrors is possible
This is It is true that there are some documents regarding
this, but the assertion
that there is evidence to prove this is show
another story.
The recorded data cannot (can과 not은 붙여주시거나, can’t로 표현하셔야 합니다.) prove
the theory because it is outdated data. Also many recorded data have been destroyed by result
of war. Therefore, the fact that mirrors could
be used to focus reflected light on a target is true. This counters the claim that it is impossible because of some
documents.
Second, the speakers says that the evidence about
targeting a single ship with multiple mirrors is true.
Although, it is hard to aim
simultaneously, there is evidence to verify something else. Actually, it is
true that they are trained. That means they had skill to target. Therefore, it is possible for them to aim exactly. This goes
against the writer's view that it is impossible
to aim simultaneously and exactly.
Finally, the professor mentions that the a point regarding the small size of the fires. Even
though it is small fires Although the fires were small, they were actually
fast. there is point to illustrate otherwise. The fires were actually
fast. (문법상 오류가 너무 많습니다. ‘There is point to illustrate otherwise’ 라는 표현을 너무 많이 사용하셔서 어색한 느낌을 받습니다.) Even
if small fires the fires were small, they
it could cause large fires.
This is in direct opposition to author's view that the
fire produced using mirrors were not big enough to burn the ships.
Writing 0-30 Score Scale:
Fair (17-23)
Overall Comment: 전체적인 글의 Flow도 좋고 포인트도 정말 잘 잡아주셨지만, 문법 상 어색한 부분이 너무 많습니다. 스펠링 오류는 많지 않지만, 문법 오류들 때문에 전체적으로 이해하기 어려운 부분이 있습니다. 수고 많으셨어요.
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