The lecturer asserts that the reading’s claim is groundless. (reading의 클레임이 뭔지
여기서 명시해주셔야 더 자연스러워요. 이런 식으로: The
lecturer asserts that the reading’s claim that there is clear evidence that the
Chinese had already explored America before Columbus arrived in 1492 is
groundless.) This casts doubt on the
reading’s point that there is clear evidence that the Chinese had already
explored America before Columbus arrived in 1492.
First of all, the speaker maintains that the old Chinese map cannot be
evidence. This is because the map contains the concept of a hemisphere which
did not exist in China at that time. Also, he says that the text in the map was
translated by other people so the map is forgery. This refutes the reading’s
claim that if the Chinese had not been to
America, they could not have been able to produce the map.
Second, the speaker argues that the presence of the artifact does not
prove Chinese’ arrival before Columbus. He explains that we can know the
presence of the Vikings
because the Vikings’ traces
have survived until now. However, a few coins and beads are not obvious
evidence. This casts doubt on the reading’s point that the pre-Columbian
Chinese artifacts proves that the Chinese discovered America before
Columbus.
Lastly, the
lecturer asserts that the similar lacquering
techniques in Mexico and China are merely coincidence coincidental.
He supports his view by saying that every cultures has developed
independently. For example, although Egypt did not come
in contact with America (did not contact는 연락을 안 했다 라는 뜻으로 해석이 됩니다.), their styles of
pyramids are similar. This rebuffs the reading’s insistence that the use of the
technique in Mexico proves that the Chinese arrived prior to Columbus’ arrival.
Writing 0-30 Score Scale
Good (24-30)
Overall Comment:
포인트도 매우 잘 잡아주셨고, 글의 전체적인 흐름도 자연스럽습니다. 하지만 살짝 아쉬운 점이 있다면 문법적인 오류들과 맥락에 잘 어울리지 않는 표현들을 쓰셔서 고쳐드렸습니다. 항상 파이팅 하세요!