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For most, news media plays an
important role in their lives. There are obviously many opinions regarding this
topic. However, it is clear that we can believe news media for many reasons.
The concepts of success and efficiency clearly illustrate this theme.
First, it is good for future
careers to think that news media is reliable. We
need a lot of information to succeed. Thus, if we believe new media, we can
learn many different opinions regarding things that I
am interested in.
Take my friend's experience,
for example. My friend became successful, because he believed new media is reliable. He
watched so many a lot of news such as
internet news, TV news, paper news newspapers
and so on. He learned so many things and acquired much information.
Many companies in Korea tend to hire people who
have many a lot of experience and
information, so he could have had a lot of job opportunities. He became one of the
top earners in his industry. The fact that he
believed that news media is a reliable sources and started to watch
watching many news helped him become
successful. He learned many things that he could not learn in the
classroom. This example is comparable to the experiences of other people who believe that news media is a
reliable. They can achieve great success.
Second, it is much more
efficient. People can utilize their resources more efficiently and they do not
have to waste of times. Many people believe that news media is reliable
because they can make the most of their time.
Let me explain this. A really good example is my friend Jonathan Chen. I got an impression that it was incredibly efficient for him
to believe that media is a reliable sources. My
friend loves jogging. He is the representative
of the jogging club. He needed to find out how the
weather it will be. He believed the weather broadcasting is reliable and
checked the weather news every(put a space here)time when he wanted to jog. He only
had to spend 1 minutes to find out today's whether (weather). He
could enjoy jogging with his club members wherever
whenever the weather was good. He could save a lot of time and use the time for other
worthwhile things. He did not have to worry
about the weather. This example would apply to other people who watch weather
broadcasting and believe that weather news is reliable. They can save a lot of
resources because of the efficiency obtained.
For some, it may seems
like the new media is not a reliable source of
unbiased information.
However, through the examples
related to success and efficiency, one can logically conclude that we can save a lot of resources because of the
efficiency obtained.
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글의 포인트는 잘 잡아주셨습니다. 하지만 흐름이 부자연스럽습니다. 문장이 너무 짧거나, 사용하시는 표현들이 살짝 난이도에 있어서 아쉽습니다. 문법 실수도 매우 많아서 글에 집중하기가 힘들었습니다. 대문자를 해야 할 문자들은 소문자로, 그 반대로 마찬가지였습니다. 하지만 포인트는 잘 잡아주셨으니 조금만 더 연습하시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
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