▶ Your Answer :
In order to conserve energy effectively, the government should increase the price of gasoline and
electricity. Do you agree or disagree?
Tax -> impact on low income
Promote green tech better
The government should not increase the price of
gasoline. (이건 노트를 하신 건가요?)
First, the government should be responsible for the
redistribution of income of the citizens. However, of if the government increases the price of gasoline, the
low income earners would not be able to afford
the high priced products. This could become even
more severe if the high priced products are necessities that people must
purchase.
Second, it would be more advisable to promote green
technology as this would be better in the long-term. Giving an advantage to use
using green technology or making people to
conserve energy through national campaigns would
be better. Changing the behaviour of the people would last more longer
than just increasing the price of gasoline to conserve the energy.
In conclusion, raising the price of gasoline would not
be the ideal solution to conserve energy.
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