Opinion might be divided whether people should have meals with their family members regularly or not. People of various ages and from different walks of life may take diverse position on this issue. Some people would argues that they do not need to have meals regularly with their family due to the different difference of life styles. However, in my opinion, I agree with the statements (‘나는 ~~~이라고 생각한다’고 글쓴이의 주장을 명확하면 더 좋습니다.) for the following reasons.
To begin with, by eating meals with family members, people are more care more about nutrition for their health. They will use better ingredients and cook nutritious food. Generally people who live alone do not consider seriously about their meals, so more often go out for the meals and eat fast food or precooked food. For example, when I entered the university I moved out of my parents’ house, and I did not eat breakfast but often ate fast food. As a result, I gained a lot of weight that brought me much stress. Once my vacation started, I came back to my parents’ home house and enjoyed homemade food everyday which was very nutritious and well balanced its taste. I became started losing my weight that I got from the life living alone.
"혼자 살면 밥을 제대로 안 먹는다“는 주장은 근거나 설명이 좀 더 필요합니다. 혼자 살면 왜 밥을 잘 먹지 않게 될까요? 예로 든 본인은 혼자 살 때 왜 밥을 제대로 안 먹었는지?
On top of that, it (무엇이?) will help to enhance family bonding during the meal. Each family members can keep up with one another’s life. There are families that grow apart emotionally even when they live together since then do not have time to talk. Therefore people need some time together and eating meals on a regular basis will bring good chance to improve family relationship. When I was in high school, my father set a rule to have dinner all together every Sunday night, and we all tried to keep that regardless of our personal agenda. I felt moral support from my family by having dinner especially, when I had was in trouble outside.
To sum up, It would not be easy to have meals with family on a regular basis since people go through different stages of life. However eating meals with family would improve our life in both physically and emotionally, so I highly recommend to have meals with them regularly.
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