▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that traveling in a group led by a
tour guide is the best choice. However, in my opinion, I believe that traveling
alone allows people to have more advantages than traveling in a guide group.
This is because it allows people to save money and to improve a sense of
responsibility.
To begin with, traveling alone enables people to save
money. This due to the fact that people compared to the past when people
depended mostly on the papers to gather information, today’s people rely more
and more on Internet based machines such as computer and smartphone. Therefore,
today’s people can easily travel alone without spending extra money for a tour
guide by collecting all the information what they need via Internet. For
example, a few years ago, I planned to travel to a city (Name it) in Africa. I found
information relevant to the region on other persons a person’s famous blog. The Korean blogger who
lived there posted every detailed information about the city. Added to the
information, I brought my smartphone to search exact locations and it helped me
to travel alone without any difficulty and extra expense.
On top of that, traveling alone allows people to improve a sense of
responsibility. This is because traveling alone
requires responsibility such as searching all the
information needed, making a reservation
accurately, arriving at a place on time, managing a schedule, and observing
national regulations. According to a research by National Youth Leadership Council,
students who tend to travel alone do better academically than their peers who
do not because they know how to handle multiple tasks and responsibilities and
can consequently manage their time well. On the whole, students who traveling
alone are more mature and better equipped to succeed than those who are not.
These benefits extend far outside the classroom.
To sum up, traveling alone is beneficial to build
responsibility as well as to cut expense.
In this regard, I strongly believe that people have more merits when they
travel alone than do in a group with a guide.
채점기준표
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Grammar
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Example
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Coherence
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점수
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4
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4
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3
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4
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Score
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Good 22-25
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