Many people said say that leadership is a born-gift and it contain too many requirements to get, thus leadership cannot be earned from learning. But However, I do not hold this idea. There are two main reasons why I disagree with them. This is because childhood and adolescence experience of childhood or period of teenager is very critical to form a person’s character. Character which is a vital trait for leadership. In addition, making an effort is enough to be a leader.
The first reason is that experience will give the power to get leadership. Leadership’s The sources of leadership are various, including courage, consideration for others, and flexibility and so on. (원래 쓰신 대로면 완성된 문장이 안 됩니다.) And These features are influenced by many people. We met meet many people since while we grow up, and they are very affect us influence us very much to make our characters. For instance, I’ll I will give an example relating myself. My early expereinces experiences are school life and outer activities like such as camping. I could met meet different and diverse people in that area. In this environment, people I met are always give gave me the source (무엇을 주었다는 것인지? 여기서 ‘source’라는 단어를 어떤 의미로 사용하셨나요?), sort of such as thoughtfulness, kindness, and cheerfulness. and Also I would gave them advice. This interaction of community was very helpful to improve my self-esteem, moreover lift my leadership. Likewise, valuable experience supports people’s mind and can makes leadership.
On top of that, if we trying hard to develop the ability, most people would want to acknowledge us. To be a leader, it is important for people to try to every aspect of events (무엇을 시도하라는 것인지 글쓴이의 의도가 명확하지 않습니다). It is demands that planning to the future, and require struggling with other barriers. It’s It is true, for example, many historical greatest people demonstrated this point. They were not all gifted. Instead, they tried hard to acheive achieve success. (구체적인 예시 없이는 글에 별 도움이 안 되는 내용입니다.) In addition they attempted to heard about people’s comments. People near of them could be advisers, so people helped them and openly talked about what they missed is. And Even gifted people implement to worked hard to develop their leadership, they did not going lazy but be a hardworker. Therefore, effort is a prerequisite to be a successful person.
On these reasons, I think it’s that it is not critical having to have born-gift to get a leadership. When we have more diverse experiences more and diverse, and try to hard to get develop abilities, our qualities are will be better than born-gifted people.
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