Some people might think that staying in their town has makes people feel more successful and happier than moving out. Both sides (두 입장을 제시를 해주셨어야 이런 표현을 쓸 수가 있죠.) have their own reasons to support their views. However, if I were asked to choose one, I would say that it more has more to do with success and happiness to move out than to stay. The rationale behind this is that people can broaden their perspectives and be successful by moving to a new place.
To begin with, when people translocate to a new city, they are likely to have more chances to success. By moving out of the city where they originally lived, they tend to get a lot of experiences and broaden their views. For example, when I was in high school, I lived in Jin-Ju where is a rural area of Korea. I often felt depression thinking that my life became an exhausted routine. Due to its rural environment condition, I could not have any pastime except reading books and writing. However, when I became a freshman in college, I could move out to a new city and realize that there were a lot of things to do which was very interesting. I often went to a library and gallery and met so many people of diverse backgrounds. A plethora of interesting things made me feel happy and inspired me to write something. By doing this, I could write a lot of essays which was related to my own experiences. Also, this led me to be hired by a large newspaper publishing company which required applicants to get have a wide range of experiences. This implies that moving to a new city helps people get experiences and be more successful.
To sum up, I strongly believe that people are it is better for people to move out of their town than to stay. This is because they can have a variety of thoughts and views through many experiences. All in all, the importance of experience cannot be overestimated in life.
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