If parents wish to see their children succeed in life, they should set strict rules for them.
Some people argue that parents must have strict rules for their children. However, in my opinion, this perspective is not true for two following reasons which I am going to elaborate. One reason is that strict rules can cause a lot of stress for children. Another reason is that this these rules can break relationship between parents and their children.
To begin with, as far as stress is concerned, it is obivious that strict rules have bad influence on for children. To explain, sStress is really harmful in many ways. It can cause emotional problems, health problems and poor performances. Thus, by receiving strict rules from their parents, children cannot get a good grade and could not become successful students in their school. A survey was conducted by UCLA's research department. The survey participants were composed of one hundred students at Kangnam Elementary School. They were asked that when your parents give some strict rules for you, what do you do? The result showed that 78% of the participants answered that they go to outside in order to meet friends. Also they said that, in this case, I feel really stressed so I could^not study harder. While 22% of the participants had claimed that I study more harder. This survey confirms that strict rules have harmful influence on for children.
On top of that, if parents set forceful rules for their children, relationship with their children can become bad. To be specific, even if strict rules seems instructive and positive for children, it can cause many troubles with their relationship with parents. There are many different things parents can do for their children such as passing on knowledge, giving advice and sharing personal stories. For example, when I was in middle school, I had a passive personality due to my parents. I had a hard time adapting to my home atmosphere since my parents always gave a lot of rules for me. Going to home was merely a daily routine. However, after talking a lot of things with my parents such as my mind and a lot of stress, my parents have had been changed. So I could have good relationships with my parents. Thus, I could be an active person and got back on track. Come to think of it, it became a turning point in my life.
Finally, I think I have accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter. To sum up, strict rules can cause a significant amount of stress for children and it can spoil relationship between parents and their children. In this regard, I believe forceful rules cannot be good for children.
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