The reading passage contends that the Etruscans, the ancient inhabitants of Italy, originated from Turkey. (글의 소재가 무엇인지 이런 식으로 조금만 더 설명해주세요.) On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several points that contradict this argument.
First, the reading passage states that DNA evidence shows that the Etruscans migrated from Turkey. However, the lecturer rebuts the reading passage's assertion by saying that because the DNA was from a long time ago, it would have been damaged. Also, because many people contacted the archeological sites, the DNA must have been contaminated.
Second, the reading passage explains that language indicates that the Etruscans have Turkish roots. However, the lecturer argues that this idea is not strong enough to prove it. The reason is that similarity of alphabet between Etruscans and Turkish does not necessarily mean that they have the same language the languages are from the same origin. This is because there are possibilities that of different languages has having the similar alphabets. Also, we cannot strongly assume that Etruscans differ from Indo-European languages that are spoken nearby, this is because there is a possibility that Etruscans are was the only surviving member of its language family.
reading passage의 주장이 첫 문장으로 너무 간략하게만 정리되고 넘어갑니다. 예를 들어 “reading passage에 따르면 Etruscan과 Turkish의 알파벳이 비슷했다”는 설명이 먼저 나와야지만 뒤에서 “알파벳이 비슷한 것만으로는 언어의 뿌리가 같다고 할 수 없다”는 반박이 성립하겠지요? language family와 관련된 마지막 문장도 “reading이 뭐라고 했길래 lecture에서 이런 반박이 나오는지?”가 설명되지 않고 있습니다.
Third, the reading passage points out that the Turkish and the Etruscans shared funerary practices, such as cremation. However, the lecturer is in the opposition to the idea. The lecturer claims that cremation was practiced in Italy even before the Etruscans were established settled there. This implies that the Etruscans would have been a successor of this local tradition, not of the Turkish one.
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관사와 명사의 단복수를 주의해서 쓰세요. 민족(사람들)에는 정관사가 붙고 복수로 씁니다. (the Etruscans, the Koreans) 언어에는 관사가 붙지 않고 단수로 씁니다 (Etruscan, Korean)
전반적으로 lecture의 반박만 정리가 되고 있습니다. “lecture는 reading passage의 주장을 ~~~ 이라고 반박했다”고 하려면, reading passage의 주장이 무엇인지가 어느정도는 설명이 먼저 되어야합니다.