There are some people saying that a good communication skill is not important for being a successful leader or politician. However, I totally disagree with this opinion. I think that one should develop the communication skill to become a good leader or politician, This is because, a good communication skill makes a person seemed to be look trusty, and by communication, leaders can understand what other people want.
To begin with, leaders can make a trusty image by making good communication with other people. To be specific, when people are aware that their leader is willing to share the significant information with them, they might think that the leader is very honesty and trusty. This statement can be supported by the result of a mayor election in Korea, Seoul, Korea. There were two candidates in the race. One candidate focused on advertisement, and the other candidate focused on comminication communicating with voters. As the a result, the candidate who focused on communication winned that election.
On the top of that, good communication skill is very helpful for understanding what other people want. and Knowing other people's need is essential for being a successful leader. I can give a good example that can support this claim. When I was in university, the dean of my college was always interested in students’ opinion. He conducted online surveys to improve the students’ study environmnet studying environment. As the a result, he successfully managed the college and improved the students’ quality of study. It is apparent that his ability to communicate with his students led to his success.
In conclusion, good communication skill can give a trusty image to a leader and is helpful for understanding other people's opinion. For these reasons, I think that communication skill is essential for being a successful leader or politician.
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