▶ Your Answer : The issue on whether television should focus either on its entertaining function or on its educating function is controversial. Some people might think that television should play an educating role for its viewers. However, in my opinion, I think television should keep its entertaining role for people for the following two reasons.
To begin with, television is functioning as an important stress-reliever for many people in our modern society. As the current society is getting busier and busier due to the rapid industrialization and technological development, more and more people have no time to organize their own entertaining activities, and watching television at home can be one of the few leisure activities people can do. For instance, a recent poll conducted by the Korean National Broadcasting Company in 2016 showed that 87 percent of people living in Seoul, South Korea, watch television in their free time. What is more is that 94 percent of those answerers replied that watching television shows, such as talk shows or music programs, helps them to relieve stress effectively. Considering the results, television should concentrate on offering entertaining programs for its viewers while acknowledging how much entertaining impact it has on people in the current society.
Secondly, watching television entertainment programs is one of the cheapest hobbies that poor people can afford to. Unlike the rich people who have enough money to spend for going on vacation every year or doing expensive hobbies such as playing instruments or painting, poor people simply do not have money to entertain themselves. In this respect, watching television is an important entertaining activity for people who have no money, by offering them cheap and enjoyable entertaining programs. For example, my neighbor, Mr. Kim, is a poor old man whose one and only hobby is watching television shows. Although we have not much in common, I and Mr. Kim sometimes talk about Voice of Korea show, a music audition television program which is very popular in Korea. He expresses his admiration and excitement about the show whenever we start to chat. Although he cannot buy music instrument or any music lessons, he told me that he feels already satisfied by watching others playing guitar or piano on the show. I think this is a very important aspect of television programs for poor people that it should keep up.
To sum up, television’s entertaining aspect is important to help people to release stress caused by the current busy working environment. Also, television plays an important role for poor people by offering entertaining programs that they can afford and enjoy. In this regard, I think television should focus on more its entertaining function than its educating function. Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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