▶ Your Answer :
Various opinions
may exist over the argument on whether spending time on preparing for the presentation should be longer or shorter that if you are supposed to make a presentation,
which do you prefer between preparing right before the presentation and
preparing for a long time. (주제 문장 그대로 사용하지 마시고 꼭 Paraphrase 해 주세요) As far as I am concerned, I prefer preparing the presentation right
before it starts. The two reasons mentioned below can be valid evidences to support my point.
First of all,
people can find emotional relief by preparing the presentation right before because
they can enjoy more free time than getting ready for it for a long time. Today, many people
are weary with too much stress. By going to theater or enjoying listening
music, however, they can temporarily forget about their problems and gain some
breathing space. In this respect, delaying preparation of the presentation as
much as possible until last minute can be a great means of saving their free
time and refreshing people’s minds. My personal experience can be used to prove
this point. Every morning, I have to get through traffic congestion to go to
work and read through countless books to prepare presentation for daily meeting.
To make matters worse, I get exhausted coping with my subordinates and boss.
Hence, as a way to relieve my stress, I frequently delay the preparation of
presentation. Instead of that time, I watch movie at my home with my family. Even
if it is only for a short period of time, my feelings become relaxed, and I am
no longer thinking about the preparation of presentation for meeting. Indeed,
during this brief period of enjoyment, I am able to alleviate tension and
better prepare myself for the upcoming days. Therefore, I prefer to prepare
right before the presentation.
--> Presentation을 완벽하게 준비할 수 없는 last minute presentation; 미리 스트레스에 노출 되는 것 보단 충분한 휴식 뒤에 발표를 준비하는 것이 효율이 더 좋다 등 좀 더 설득력있는 주장을 펼쳐주세요.
Secondly,
preparing the presentation right before is actually better than preparing for a
long time because it is more time-efficient. A key to success nowadays is efficiency.
Therefore, people who bear the maximum fruit with less are considered superior.
In this sense, saving their time by pending their preparation for the presentation
paves a more convenient way to success since people could do more valuable
things during that time such as reading books or studying hard. A research
conducted by a renowned professor named Satti from Seoul National
University indicates that people who prepare right before their presentation
attain their goal of success in a much more effectual way whereas having the
same accomplishments is somewhat difficult for people who preparing for a long
time. Likewise, his research proves that my argument is convincing.
All things
considered, with the reason mentioned above, I have sufficiently and adequately
explained my opinion in terms of stress and efficiency. (결론 내용이 다소 부족합니다. 본인의 주장에 대한 이유 요약 + 제언 방향 등을 포함하여 결론을 풍부하게 작성해주세요.)
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