The lecturer disagrees with the reading passage’s claim on cutting music classes by presenting three counterarguments.
The lecturer claims that music classes help picking up other subjects like mathematics and languages. This is because musical notation related to mathematics enforces abstract thinking skills and the ability to distinguish minute differences helps students to understand languages. This counters the reading passage’s claim that instrumental music classes bother the learning of other important subjects, because they reduce the time spent for other important subjects. (reading passage의 claim을 정확하게 설명해주세요. reading이 문제 삼는 건 단순히 “시간을 뺏는다”가 문제가 아니라 “그래서 공부가 제대로 안 된다.”)
Second, the schools are trying to recruit volunteer teachers and are being donated with old or unused instruments. This means that the expenses for expensive instruments does not matter. This rebuffs the reading passage’s claim that music classes are too costly with because of expensive instruments.
Lastly, the lecturer argues that learning music is rewarding as it enriches the life of students and allows them to express themselves in creative ways. Moreover, those students inspired by music can later practice music in adulthoods as adults. This contradicts the reading passage’s claim that learning music is never of a benefit as not every students becomes a successful musicians.
Writing 0-30 scale
Fair (23-25)
전반적으로 두 passage의 내용을 잘 정리하고, lecture가 reading을 반박하는 논리를 잘 설명했습니다. 다만, 본문의 파란색 코멘트와 같이 설명이 조금 부족한 부분이 보입니다.
일부 문법 면에서 어색한 부분이 있습니다. 특히 동사를 주어의 단/복수에 어울리는 형태로 쓰세요.