A prevalent of topic undergoing serious debate is whether students should be rewarded based on their efforts such as doing their best rather than based on the result such as grades. Two different opinions exist in regard to this topic. I agree with the idea that it is more important for students to receive rewards based on their efforts such as doing their best than other for two reasons. This is because students are able to learn life values and get less stress.
To begin with, it effort-based rewards can be beneficial to learn how to not give up. While many consider that rewarding based on grades is an effective way considering a lot of factors, we cannot deny the fact that students would have a great chance to learn life values like patience regardless of good or bad results. Some day they can achieve their goal, based on these experiences. For instance, my cousin became a successful fund manager in a short period of time and she told me a secret about her success. When she was a student in high school, her teacher gave students a small gift after exams and he said that, “I was proud of you because you were did not give up to solve many questions.” So, she had valuable experiences at that time. She trained herself that I she did not give up. After all, this value aroused her to actively participate in her work and to do her best. This proves to us that patience is vital that in building a bright future. (doing one’s best와 having patience는 포인트가 좀 다른 value가 아닌지?)
On top of that, it enables students to get less stress. When they only focus on their results, it leads to unnecessarily competition with other peers and they are always in intension. Also, if students fail to get good grades, they would feel themselves inferior and lose their confidence. However, without the results, if they be rewarded based on effort, students who concentrate on their own efforts do not need to get a lot of stress as described above. In addition, a well-known professor of Seoul National University published an editorial in this field and his study supports my view. He mentioned that only focusing on grades causes students to reduce their have less positive minds and confidence. and Then, endorphins and hormones that release from human brain do not contribute to refresh their minds. He concluded by his research that students try to their own study or work.
In conclusion, I believe that rewarding based on their students’ effort is the best decision better than rewarding based on their results for two reasons. This is because students are able to learn life values like patience and get less stress.
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