The
lecturer argues that the positive aspects of the wave energy are merely
illusions. This contradicts the reading
passage’s claim that the wave energy has the potential to replace the fossil
fuel in the future due to the advantages it possesses.
To
begin with, the professor contends that the technology technological problems
makes the wave farm fail to be constant and predictable. This is because
the new technology is not reliable, so it breaks down
easily. it is easily breakdown. Moreover, the power fluctuates
widely. This casts doubt on the reading, which states that the energy farm is
reliable and able to accurately predict is accurately
predictable due to the stable pattern and well-organized documents.
In
addition, the lecturer asserts that the wave-energy facilities can also damage
the environment. Since the wave energy facilities are floating on the ocean,
these harm the ocean ecosystem. On top of that, the chemicals that are released by the wave farms that generate turbines
to move are extremely toxic and adverse to the organism that inhabits in the ocean.
Thus, if the chemicals leak, then the ecosystem of ocean will be severely
damaged. This rebuts the reading passage’s claim that the wave energy is
environmental friendly because there are no substances that provide harmful
effects to the earth.
Finally, the speaker contends that the energy farms
are not visually favorable. Mostly, the energy farms that placed under the
water are clearly visible due to the bright color which are detectable.
Furthermore, the wave energy facilities that are
built near the shore can be easily seen by the visitors who tour the beach.
This directly refutes the reading passage’s claim that wave farms have no
negative impact to the beauty of the area and landscapes.
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