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The reading passage covers three major points concerning the disappearance of Anasazi civilization and its cause. The listening passage lecturer, which is who speaks also of the same topic, clearly states why these points are debatable. The first point made in the reading passage is that less nutrient bones are found in the graves and hence it can be contributed that infrequent rainfall reduced crop production and the people had less food. *less는 비교급을 뜻하기 때문에 어떤 것에 비해 더 less였는지 말씀해주시는 것이 좋습니다. The speaker, however, challenges this by mentioning that the health issue was prevalent regardless of the amount of rainfall. Also, roughly 85% of the people suffered malnutrition even in the bountiful years because they had to provide their products to a religious leader. Hence, the less nutrient bones may not be an effective reason of the drought. (가뭄에 대한 argument라고 써주셔야 합니다 그렇지 않으면 일반 가뭄의 대한 reason으로 해석이 됩니다.) Another point made by the reading is that the people reserved the town in order to come back when the dry season ended ends. Again, to the contrary, the lecturer asserts that this is not true due to the fact that they did not return to home. The records show that Anasazi people did not go back to their original habitat even after the drought had ended. Thus, blocked town entrance might not be a persuasive reason to support the entire topic. topic이 무엇인지 다시 풀어써주시고 문장을 더 clear하게 써주세요. 이전 문장과 연결이 잘 되고 있지 않습니다. 제 3자로 인해 town entrance가 막힌건지, 왜 그들이 original habitat로 돌아가지 못했는지에 대한 설명이 있었다면 그 부분을 확실하게 제시해주셔야 할 것 같습니다. Lastly, the reading passage claims that Anasazi people tried to resettle in the at a place where it has there were reliable water supplies. The professor further debunks this by saying that the place they settled were was Arizona in the US where the water supply is not adequate. The weather they choose chose to settle is was arid and very hard harsh to live. Therefore, their efforts to find a hydrated place is probably not a viable reason. (reason for what?)
Score: Limited (1-16), Fair (17-23), Good (24–30) Comments: - 강의와 리딩의 내용 요약이 매우 잘 되어있습니다. - 그러나 마무리 문장에서 조금 부족합니다. 토픽과의 연결을 더 매끄럽게 해주세요. 항상 풀어서 길게 계속 다시 써주고 하는 것이 더 좋습니다, 인트로에서 이미 소개되었더라도 반복해서 써주세요.
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