▶ Your Answer : disagree Some people say that only government effort
can solve the serious environmental issues. However, in my opinion, there are diverse
solutions to improve these problems. There are two reasons. One is that by exposing
environmental advertisements to people by the television screens the importance
of their environmental view can be developed. Moreover, eco-friendly technology
is able to reduce environmental pollution. 나머지 paragraph에 비해 introduction이 너무 깁니다. 내용 길이 balance맞춰서 적는거 중요하니 주의해주세요 To begin with, environmental education enables
people to participate in eco-friendly campaigns. To be specific, joining
various events regarding with environment encourages people to understanding
for necessary of environment protection.(이렇게 설명이 안되어있는 상태에서 바로 example나오는거 안 좋습니다. 그 전에 어느정도 ground를 깔아놓고 예시 쓰도록 해주세요) For example, 4 years ago, after participating
in the Earth day event by the Korea government, I annually try to inform the
seriousness of environment issues by advertising with signs on the street.
On top of that, green products and eco-friendly technology
have been developed significantly. To be specific, these help improvement of ecosystem
to be accelerated with many kinds of recycling items. For example, several companies
launched a lot of eco-friendly products. To make Earth’s life, many people who
have environmental perspective use tumblers in cafés instead of disposal cups. In
this sense, to make our planet survive, there are many methods.
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