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Money is always a big issue throughout the whole era. Especially, in modern society, people tend to think money is a scale of success. At this moment, people have to think that people should accumulate their money or spend it immediately. A few years ago, YOLO was a very popular keyword among young people. However, in my opinion, saving money I make is much better for my life. There are two reasons as follows.
To begin with, I could prepare for any unexpected emergencies. Nobody knows what would happen to me. Because there is no spoiler about the future. So we should prepare those situations. To illustrate, a few years ago, I'd cleaned my room. When I threw out a lot of garbage in a trash box and then, I pushed it. At that time, I felt severe pain. My left hand was cut by broken glass. I had to go to the emergency room and operate to treat my hand. Of course, I had to cost a lot. Fortunately, I had enough money to pay for it due to saving money. If I had spent money as soon as I earned, I had not been able to pay for my medical expenses.
Furthermore, if I have sufficient money, I can do whatever I want to do, such as traveling, buying a car or a house, and having pursuits. I think that these things make my life more plentiful and happier. Money itself does not make me pleased, but when I optimize my money, I can be happy. For example, I'm a coffee person. When I was younger, I just enjoyed drinking coffee. However, I wanted to know about coffee. After that, I enrolled in a coffee class and the end, I could get a barista license. Also, I really like to go on a trip with my friends. So, we decided to open a bank account that we could save money together. W saved $50 per month. After two years, we could go to New York for five nights and seven days. It was a memorable experience.
To sum up, there is no doubt saving money is helpful. The main reasons are preparing emergencies like an accident and enjoying our life by doing what we want such as going on a trip, having a habit, and getting necessary things. I would like to say to someone who spends money right away, please prepare your future.
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