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The lecturer argues that learning instrumental music helps student attain the full and balanced education. This contradicts the reading passage's claim that it is not necessary for school to maintain music classes.
First of all, the lecturer suggests that taking the music classes with instruments helps student better understand other classes such as mathematics and language courses. To be specific, abstract thinking resulting from the music classes can contribute to understanding mathematics well(,) and subtle difference (무엇의 subtle difference 인가요? 이것을 알아야 그 점 때문에 언어를 이해하기 쉽구나~ 라고 생각할 수 있습니다.) obtained in the music classes can devote to learning languages. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that student should spend more time on mathematics and language classes. WHY?
Secondly, the lecturer mentions that there are some ways to reduce the cost of the classes. For example, the music classes can be taught/ run by volunteers(,) and there are many people who are willing to donate musical instruments. This rebuffs the reading passage's claim that maintaining the music classes is too expensive. WHY? 따로 READING 에서 MENTION 된 것은 없는 지 확인해주시고 있다면 내용 추가해주세요.
Lastly, the lecturer contends that it is highly rewarding for students to learn instrumental music. To be specific, doing so can enrich their life as they are aging. In addition, even if they are not so talented at first/ in the beginning, some of them may get truly inspired while practicing the instruments. This refutes the reading passage's claim that the music classes is (주어와 동사의 수 일치가 이루어 지지 않았습니다. Music class is/music classes are/)not worth since not every student has talent.
Music classes 라고 쓰여진 부분들 다 밑줄을 쳐봤는데요. 주어는 music classes 인데 동사는 단수로 취급하신 경우가 많으네요. 굳이 music classes 라고 하실 필요없이 music class 라고 하셔도 될 것 같습니다. 또한 내용적으로 reading 의 양이 부족해보이니 script 체크하신 후 추가되어야 할 내용을 점검해보시길 바랍니다. 수고하셨습니다~ |