It is better to focus on one project at a
time and then another one.
An intriguing topic of discussion at hand
is whether it is better to focus on one project at a time or not. The answer to
this question can greatly vary depending on the individual perspectives. Thus, the
jury can may still be out, as far as I am concerned, I agree with
the statement. In this essay, I will
present two reasons supporting my standpoint as follows.(ing : ) First(ly), focusing on one project is more effective in spending time (time efficient).
Second, (,
and secondly,) It is able to make person have a more sense of purpose (stronger
motivation / better guidance).
To begin with, I believe that people having
one project at a time spend time more effective (efficiently).
This is because, people usually pay
more attention on (the) project (when they concentrate on one, rather than many) than they have a lot of project. It is obvious
that people can promote their (pay more) attention skill
(why suddenly skill? → when) having
just one plan. From my experience, when I was a college freshman, I had a
part-time job in restaurant for my pocket money
(to earn money → sounds more mature). At that time,
since I spent a lot of time in (doing) my part-time job, I paid little attention on
my grade (schoolwork).
As a result, I got a poor grade(s) and I failed to earn a
tuition. In these (this) sense, I strongly think that when people have
one plan to do (carry out), they use their time efficiently.
On the top of that, having one project let(s) people gain a more
sense of purpose (a stronger motivation).
This is attributed(able) to the reason that people are free(dom) from the
(possible) distraction(s)
which they may have had.
Suppose you have three project(s) which must be
finished on (by)
this month. (This means that) You have
three sense of purpose (different kinds of motivation), and you are motivated (to do) various projects. (I don’t understand the purpose of this sentence.) It
makes you lose your attention and distracts your ability. Finally, you could be
failed (on) one of that (those) projects,
and be depressed your achievement which can not
accomplish. Like above, if people
have one purpose, It would improve your sense of
purpose (No!) and ability.
(The second supporting
paragraph repeats the first one. They eventually mean the same.)
In conclusion, I strongly argue for my
standpoint on account of two reasons mentioned above. Once again, although the verdict can may still be out, I
personally believe that two of my rationales above are sufficiently convincing the viewpoint of a (for
the) majority of people who are in favor of my opinion.
(I think you read somewhere about juries being out and verdicts being
out, but I recommend against using such quoted expressions if it is Grammatically
Wrong and Not suited for the overall atmosphere of your essay. Sorry. 확실하지 않다면 쓰지 마세요^^) |