▶ Your Answer :
I agree that the
importance of cooperating with others well is much more important
than before, especially in today’s Digital and Internet Age where everyone
around us works in a very fast and very sophisticated way with the help of
complex digital technologies. Even making a small part in a small cellphone (that) we
carry everyday would be impossible without the cooperation of many people,
because of its high complexity. In this essay, I will demonstrate three crucial
reasons of why the importance inportantce of cooperating
with others is in much more high-demand these days
than before.
To begin with, as time goes by,
the number of technology for a person
to have to learn and develop in his professional area will increase so fast
that the person must cooperate with others to share knowledge knowledges and
reduce the risk of the failure. When
agriculture was predominant over the world as a means of living, the
necessity of working together the number of the time when a person
had to work together with others was not as high as now. Usually, it
was only a cultivating or harvest season when a farmer needed to cooperate with
others. However, in the
Digital Age, even inventing and manufacturing a small device demands lots of
money and hands of professionals. That’s
why there is more needs for people to
cooperate with others.
Secondly, it is very
crucial for becoming successful to widen our views of others in order
to better understand the global community where more than 7 billion people live
in. And cooperating with others, who have different backgrounds and customs, is
one of the best ways to broaden our experience. And owing to the evolution
of digital information technology, time and space will never be an impediment
for people to share their views and cooperate even with others who live on the
opposite site of the earth. In the long run, the situation will provoke people
to work in a wider and bigger scale than before with others over the world.
Lastly, cooperation is also vital in the modern workplace. In
the past, all the different
branches and divisions of a corporation were largely considered to be separate. However,
these days, there is a greater awareness
that the different parts of an organization are actually interconnected. Therefore, every
member of the company has have to communicate wit each other and work
together on projects these days.
- 과거와는
달리
현재
어떤
기관의
부서들이 interconnected 되었다는 의견을 잘 보여줄 수 있는 예시가 있으면 더 좋겠다는 생각이 듭니다! ^^
To sum up, cooperation is becoming evermore important in our modern world. Due to the competitiveness
of the global economy, the
complexity of the workplace, and the diversity of society, people need to be able to cooperate with
others these days in order to succeed.
여러가지
근거로
주장을
잘
드러내셨어요~
다만,
cooperation 이라는
단어의
반복적인
등장을
글을
지루하게
만들
수
있다는
사실에
주의하셔서
조금씩
다르게
표현해보는
연습을
하시면
좋을
것
같아요~ |