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There are numerous things that people should do(,) and some of them/ some of which are not enjoyable. Contrary to the popular opinion that people should do the things regardless of their preference/ that they do not enjoy, I believe that people should not be forced to do what they cannot enjoy not enjoyable things. The reasons are is that when people do the things they do not enjoy, it likely results in poor quality work(,) and people will just get bad self-esteem and huge stress that they would not be getting otherwise.
First of all, if people do not have enough interest in what they are doing/ to a work, the result will be poor, because they would often slack off and not concentrate. Thus, their time and work are wasted. Instead of wasting time by spending on the things they do not like, it is better and more efficient to let people use the same time on the things they are passionate about. According to a study conducted by the Ministry of Education of Korea in 2007, two groups were compared in learning ability: Group A were made up of children who were given with a choice to read whatever they like, and Group B consisted of children who had to read a book that was assigned. Interestingly enough, Group A understood contents of the book far better than Group B. Group B were confused and missed a lot of many crucial information from the book. This clearly shows that having people to do the things that are not enjoyable results in poor performance.
Furthermore, when people do the things they are not interested about, it will probably set poor self-esteem and give them unnecessary stress. This is because there is a high chance that people will not perform well as well as they expected, and they get discouraged and feel bad about themselves as a result. On top of that, they will get overloading amount of stress by doing things that are not enjoyable. In my country, Korea, most students almost all students are forced to spend most of their time studying. Due to this harsh education system, many students in high school are choosing wrong path in their lives/ are going wrong way go to wrong path, and perform very poorly in school, and in some extreme cases, commit suicide. This implies that when people do the things that are not enjoyable, it causes to have bad self-image and creates many negative consequences. 하기 싫을 함으로써 갖게 되는 low self esteem 등이 분명하게 그려지는 예는 없습니다. 조금 더 구체적으로 서술해주시면 좋을 것 같네요~
To sum up, I think that it is better for people to do the things they can enjoy(,) rather than wasting time in trying to work with the things that do does not interest them. Doing so will bring happier life and higher self-image to people's lives.
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