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In my country, there is one sort of proverb which presents this situation. The proverb means breifly that a son broke his leg so he was sad because it was harvesting time but just after it. the empire recruit army to invade another country. However he didn't go to the army because of his leg. As this story of proverb, we sometimes have events which are expected bad result but in reality helpful. For me, it was necessary to spend 2-year on millitary. Korean men mostly don't want go there because we think it is waste of our time. Nevertheless I regard it with different way than most korean men do because I learned how to drive during millitary service and I feel stronger than I was. ( 서론이 너무길어요. 본론보다 길면 문제가 상당히 커집니다. 서론과 결론의 분량은 짧을수록 더좋습니다. 그래야 본론에서 쓸내용도 많아지고 구조가 더 정확해지는거죠 ㅎㅎ.) 아마 정말실제로 이렇게 쓰시면 감점 상당히 클 것입니다.)
First. My position while I was in army was driver therfore I had to practice and get used to drive. When we graduated school. we'd better familiar to drive because nowadays using a car is better important than before. For me I didn't have to make effort to learn driving because during millitary service, My suervisor tought me; Therefore, I can drive well. Plus I also learn to fix a car, just small problem I can though.
Secondly, I believe that I can overcome although I am in very serious predicament. In other words, I got confidence. when korean men are in millitary service. We are instructed special class and that is extremely severe. this class leads us untill our limit. Thus, After finish that class, We think that we can do any thing and we can succeed any thing because there is not harder thing than that class.
To sum up, I have many events which seems to be going badly but turns out well and one of this events is about my duty to go to millitary. I think it helps and influences a lot to my life because I learned how to drive and I got confidence.
(화나실진 모르겠지만, 본론은 지웠습니다.)
에쎼이가아니라 일기를 듣는것 같았습니다. topic sentence 도 자신의 이야기를 쓰시네요... 그쪽부분은 적어도 일반화 해주셔야하는데, 그리고난뒤에 예시에서 짧게나마 자신의 이야기를 쓰실 수 있습니다. 아직 에쎄이에 익숙하지 않으신것 같아요. 한번모델에쎄이 보시면서 배워신다음에 배우면좋겠습니다. ㅎㅎ.수고하셨습니다 ^^ |