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The lecturer argues that it is wrongly widespread that chimpanzees are aggressive whereas bonobos are not. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s opinion that bonobos and chimpanzees have significant similarities in genetics but their innate behaviors are very different, especially on their aggressiveness.
To begin with, the lecturer insists that bonobos are aggressive too. For example, they sometimes throw some objects away and fight against their friends surrounding. (여기서 약간의 detail이 좀더 필요하지 않을까요? 첫번쨰 포인트 분량이 조금 부족한거같아요.. This contradicts the reading passage’s claim that bonobos are unaggressive and charming.
Second, the lecturer claims that the reasons why the bonobos are rarely fight (fight이 동사이므로 are 없애주세요 against and adults look affective are they raised by their parents. He says that if they are not raised by the parents, young bonobos may be attacked by the adults. This stands against that the older bonobos do not attack the young in their group so that they are affectionate, while the chimpanzees kill their group member and even eat.
Lastly, the lecturer argues that the chimpanzees like to eat fruit than meat as same as the bonobos do. The human made the chimpanzees to have meat because there are no fruits on their surrounding area, and if the bonobos are exposed to the same environment, they will do the same way. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s opinion that bonobos like having fruits but chimpanzees love eating meat.
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