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Some people
might think that going to the museum is the best way that we can learn about a
country(,) because there are many arts and artifacts related to the country.
However, in my opinion, I believe it is hard to say that it is the best way we
should seek for(,) when we want to know about a country. I have two reasons for
my assertion. First, the museum does not contain intangible cultural heritage
of the country. Second, it can only show the history of the country.
First and
foremost, we cannot find every important cultural legacy in the museum. This is
because(,) the museum can only hold tangible arts and artifacts. However, there
are still exists many invisible
cultural sources that we should know to understand the country, such as foods,
music and language. For example, about two years ago, I had a chance to meet
with a famous traveler in person. At that time, what she emphasized/what she put emphasis on was that if people really wanted
to have a thorough understanding of a country, people should experience many
things in person including tasting traditional foods, meeting its people or
sleeping at its conventional style house.
On the top
of that, museum cannot show the present of a country. To be specific, when we
go to the museum, what we can see is only the collection of relics that people
in the country made use of in the past. Although, it is capable of representing
how people live long time ago, it can be meaningless to people who want to know
what is happening in the country at this moment. The National Korean Travel Agency surveyed foreign
visitors when they went back to their own countries about what point they were very
sorry for during the travel. 1. According to a survey conducted by the National Korean Travel Agency,
the foreign visitors were surveyed, when they went back to their own countries.
One question was about what point they were very sorry for during the travel. The most frequent answer was that they
could not see dynamics of Korea in person and how Koreans people live right now. If they had the chance to visit places such
as markets or famous city square, they would not have felt like that.
1.
According
to 를 쓰셨으면 그 research 에서
뭐라고 했는지가 바로 나와야하는데, 여기서 쓰인 문장을 해석하면 “한국관광청에
따르면, 외국인 관광객들이 조사되었다” 입니다. 즉, 조사 결과가 나오지 않았으므로 according to 가 적합하게 사용되지 못했습니다.
In
conclusion, as stated above, we can think of two disadvantages of visiting the
museum when we would like to learn about a country. First, we cannot see or go
through intangible cultures such as cuisines or music in the museum. Second,
what we can know about a country is restricted to the past of the country. For
these reasons, I strongly argue that visiting the museum cannot be the perfect
way to learn about a country.
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