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The reading passage asserts that the traditional teaching method, unidirectional education, is better than newer one, bidirectional education. However, the speaker contradicts the passage with opposing view.
To begin with, while the reading passage argues that unidirectional system is time-efficient, the speaker actually points out that students cannot learn well in a unidirectional education system. They easily lose their interest on the class because the teacher is only one leading the class. Some Few of them sleep during the class or even get out of the classroom. Therefore, even though the unidirectional teaching system is less time-consuming, if students cannot learn well, it means nothing. (reading 의 입장은 구체적으로 드러나지 않았습니다. Time efficient 라고 주장하는 근거에는 어떤 것이 있는지도 설명해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.)
On top of that, the passage claims that unidirectional teaching system is more organized because people do not make many questions distracting the class. However, the speaker claims that the more structured education system is bidirectional system. As a teacher builds and designs the contents of the class together with students(,) but not forcing them to follow, better feed-back can be promoted. Also, the efficiency of a class can be ensured. Moreover, while the reading argues that unidirectional teaching system is better for the speaker (여기서는 차라리 teacher 이라는 단어를 쓰시는 것이 낫겠습니다. 뒤에 나오는 the speaker 과 헷갈릴 수 있기 때문입니다.)to finish the point of the class, the speaker contradicts that it makes students hard to understand and rather get confused.
Furthermore, the speaker denies that passage maintains that the bidirectional system is not suitable for a large class that most modern universities have. (문장이 clear 하게 전달되지 않네요. Speaker 가 denies 한 것은 bidirectional system is not suitable for a large class 입니까? 아니면 그렇게 주장한 reading passage 의 주장에 denies 한 겁니까? 정확하게 써주세요~) His reason is that students think that the professor does not pay attention to them and tend not to focus on the lecture. Therefore, the speaker says that the bidirectional system is more necessary in large classes. Also, He emphasizes that ten-minute reviewing session or oral presentation can help students to better understand in a large class. (reading 의 입장에 대한 근거가 또 부족합니다. 내용을 더 추가해주세요)
For these reasons, the speaker challenges the reading passage’s assertion that bidirectional teaching system is disadvantageous about disadvantages of bidirectional teaching system.
상대적으로 reading passage 의 입장과 그 근거 내용이 부족합니다. 균형있게 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다~ |