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It is controversial whether school should focus on purchasing computers rather than books in the library. My personal opinion taking on the matter is that a school should invest more on purchasing computers than on books for students studnents. There are a number of different argument that I can use to support my position, but I will narrow my discussion to two of the most important points that are also most relevant to the topic : First, the digital technology is considerably important in the current world, and secondly, students barely need books these days.
The first and the most important point behind my contention is that being able to use digital technology especially related to computer is significant in the contemporary world. It goes without saying that almost all college students and professors use the Internet on a daily basis. Nowadays, increasing number of people use computers for educational purposes. (계속적인 학을 위해서는 digital technology 를 잘 활용하는 것이 중요하다 라는 supportive sentence 가 있는 듯 합니다. 있는 듯 하나도 하는 이유는 조금 더 clear 하게 표현했으면 하는 바램에서 이니, 두 문장 조금만 더 clear 하게 정리해보시면 좋겠습니다.) It is necessary especially in these days for students to be able to know how to search information on the Internet because the Internet provides lots of various kinds of information. If a student does not know how to use the Internet or is not familiar with using the Internet, he or she would face significant hardships in the future. For instance, one of my friends from Africa had never used the Internet because he was solely dependent on books for his study. According to him, he did not know how to search information from the Internet, therefore, he had incredibly struggled in the first time at college. In this case, it is important to be able to adjust to in changing society in which most people use computers for various purposes. (문단의 내용은 길지만 컴퓨터를 다루는 능력이 얼마나 중요한지에 대해서는 뚜렷하게 드러나지 않았습니다. 대학에서 어떠한 식으로 인터넷/컴퓨터를 이용하는지도 구체적이지 않습니다.)
The second point lies in the fact that a number of students are not willing to read books these days. This is largely because majority of them highly rely on the Internet for their research or homeworks. Needless to say, the Internet has more abundant sources such as various pictures, a wide range of videos(,) and countless documents compared to that in the books. Since using the Internet is much more convenient than reading books when students need to get information infromation, books now become almost obsolete obsolte for many cases. From my personal experience, I had to do the final project for geography class. Even though I had several geography books, I was not willing to use those books for searching(,) mainly because I was aware of that the Internet has more academic sources related to geography. I could quickly finish the project only by using the Internet, gathering a lot of pictures. Regarding this case, students in modern ear highly depend on the Internet for their education. Therefore, it is wise for a school to invest its their money on purchasing more computers for students.
As a result, I firmly believe that aforementioned argument support my opinion that a school should focus on purchasing computers rather than investing on buying books for students. The current society is increasingly dependent on digital technology. (두 번째 근거에 대한 mention 은 없네요?) I believe that it is a school’s duty to provide an appropriate educational environment for students.
분명히 digital technology 라는 광범위한 단어를 사용하셨는데 결과적으로는 internet 에만 초점이 맞춰져있는 글인 것 같습니다. 파워포인트, 엑셀 등등 대학에서 프리젠테이션 등을 할 때 다양하게 활용될 수 있는 프로그램도 많으며 그러한 것을 배우기 위해서 학교에서는 컴퓨터 구입에 투자를 해야한다라는 내용을 기대했는데 이런 내용은 없어서 조금 아쉽습니다. 수고하셨습니다 |