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Nowadays, there are various movies and television shows which emphasize that broadcasted to people which show good people should be rewarded and bad people punished. Some of people like this type of program due to its educational aspect affect to people specially children but others do not believe that those media cannot deliver lectures to people it is effective to show lessons from movies and television shows. In my personal opinion, I support the latter and movies and television shows do not need to give lesson to people due to below reason.
Above all, I don’t believe that giving lesson to people that good people are rewarded and bad people are punished is not the role of movies and television shows. (글을 쓰시면서 의미가 좀 헷갈리신 것 같네요. Don’t believe, not the role.. 이중 부정입니다. 결론적으로 다시 해석해보면 “권선징악의 교훈을 주는 것이 프로그램의 중요한 역할이라고 믿는다” 라는 의미가 되어버렸습니다. 본인의 의견과 대조적이죠? 다시 써주세요~) As a matter of fact, this lesson should be conducted in the government organization such as school or police because movies and television shows are not professional. (이것이 supportive sentence 가 되겠군요~) Without expertise, it is dangerous to judge people whether they act properly or not and their wrong judgment could ruin people’s life who actually did not commit bad activities. For example, there was a movie describing a bad man in the farm. Even though he did not represent all farmers, people tended to have bad image of farmer from this movie which potentially and practically cause bad effect on them. (예시에 왜 전문가에 대한 이야기는 없죠? 지금 supportive sentence 로 나온 내용이 professional 하지 않기 때문이라고 하지 않으셨습니까? 그렇다면 예시를 통해서 영화나 티비 프로그램은 professional 하지 않다는 것을 보여주셔야죠~) From this example, it is certain that producers who do not have expertise (어떤 점에서 mistake 를 했다는 것가요? 무슨 내용을 어떻게 잘못 보도했나요?) of ethics could make big mistake. (lack of information.)
In addition, lesson by movies and television shows is not effective as much as people expect. Since most of people already know that there are many fictional factors included in movies and television shows, people are not willing to take the lessons which producers of movies and television programs shows want to deliver to public effectively. Rather than that, it is commonly believed by people that programs giving fun or news which makes people pleasant and educated by these programs is more beneficial to practical people’s life. In my case, I did not like movies which emphasize on sending educating message to people because I did not feel it perfectly due to its little truth. On the contrary, I would rather to learn more lesson by some programs which deliver direct information or news so that I can decide and learn that some people are good and others are not. (무슨 내용을 전달하고 있는 것인지 잘 모르겠습니다. 미디어가 교훈을 준다는 topic 에 대해 부정적인 입장을 취하셨는데 I would rather learn more lesson 이라는 말은 왜 등장하는 것인지… 잘 이해가 안됩니다.)
To conclude, I firmly disagree with the idea that movies and television shows should reward good people and punish bad people. This is because movies and television shows could deliver wrong messages, to people which might damage to personally one’s life/ private life and these programs are not effective method to teach people about lesson of good or bad behavior. Therefore, I think that producers of these programs would rather to focus on make movies and televisions programs for fun or education.
(전반적으로 글의 흐름이 끊기는 곳이 많고, 논리적이지 않습니다. 반복적인 단어의 사용도 많습니다. 코멘트해드린 부분들 생각하시면서 고민해보시고 하나씩 수정하시면 다음 번 글을 쓰실 때 도움이 될 것 같습니다.) |