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Roads are usually congested conjested by a number of cars. Some people think that drivers are the one who make traffic congestion congestion is contributed to drivers. On the contrary, others believe that facilities and other services are responsible for congestion. I argue that being stuffed with cars is charged to drivers since they drivers can direct direction to another route 무슨 말인가요? as well as cannot follow rules well.
First of all, drivers tend to utilize one way toward the destination. (ß 이것 때문에 교통체증이 생긴다는건가요? 본인의 입장에 대한 근거를 정확하게 세워주세요.) supportive sentence 가 없습니다! There are another routes although it seems demanding more time to reach the destination and more convenient. 이해가 잘 안됩니다. Demanding more time 과 more convenient 가 함께 쓰여있는데요.. 음.. 어떻게 이해를 해야할지 잘 모르겠습니다. 게다가 이것이 another route 를 설명하는 것인지 아닌지도 정확하게 모르겠네요.. 다시 정리해주세요. If they see congestion in one route and divert into another one, the condition of road would be more ambling. For example, in 2002, World Cup was held in Korea. My family went to the stadium in order to see /watch soccer game playing the soccer. At that time, a great number of people came out to see it a great deal of people were coming out for the game. Along the way to the stadium, roads were filled with cars The road for the stadium were filled with completely cars. My father chose relatively ambling but inconvenient route and other people followed us. Then, the congested road became more free as well as we could reach the destination quickly by diminishing the retarded times. 본인의 예시와 입장을 정리하여 종합하는 문장으로 마무리해주시면 좋겠습니다.
이번 문단의 전체적 내용을 보고나니, 첫 번째 문장은 “운전자들이 가장 빠른 길로만 가려고 하기 때문에 길이 막힌다” 이런 내용을 전달하는 문장이 더 적절하겠습니다.
Another reason is that drivers usually usuallly do not follow basic rules. Why do you think so? Supportive sentence. I often see for drivers to cut in between cars and not to follow the police officers’ directions police's directions. These manners are very important in maintaining the traffic light/ smooth smmoth traffic. In my case, I went to leaved left for beach with my relatives last summer vacation. It was holiday season one when a number of people were going to picnic and beach. So the road was crowded with cars. One car was beginning to cut in and other ones followed suit. Drivers behind the cars were very upset and some shouted to the drivers. 이 drivers 는 문장 앞의 Drivers 와는 다른 사람들 지칭하는 것이겠죠? 헷갈릴 수도 있으니 them 이나 다른 표현을 쓰시는 것이 좋겠습니다. The congested conjested road worsened/ became worse worsen. Therefore, not following the basic rules on the road would make heavy traffic congestion /jam it has effect on the congestion for drivers not follow the basic rules.
In conclusion, while some people believe that drivers are not responsible for the congestion, I think that drivers have a lot of impacts effects on the situation. It is because they can direct their route as well as do not follow the trivial rules. |