There are lots of biographies of succeeded entrepreneurs in libraries. After glancing those, people dream to own their own business. However, there are books of well-known companies at the other side that did not succeed. which It makes people to think again, whether they should they work in a company or as an individual. It is widely debatable as to whether working in a company or by an individual is better. However I strongly believe that working in a company is better. There are three clear reasons which support my opinions. One can learn how social relationships are in a company and Company with more brain will produce bigger larger profits, and thus, guaranteeing stable income. stability of income is promised.
To begin with, by working in a company, one can understand learn social skills with others. As Nowadays people live in an era which requires them to work in a group. Understanding social relationship is a prerequisite required skill to be a necessary important person. However, owning one’s own business could make one selfish and begrudgingly in one’s social life.
To develop moreover, working in a company can make bigger profits. There is an old saying “two heads are better than one”. Company consistsed of hundreds and thousands of people workers/employees cannot be competed with a business entrepreneur who works individually by individual. Company with cooperated people can results in greater profits.
At the last, by working in a company, one can be promised with a stable salary every month. My aunt in a high position in a of big company, for example, who has experience of managing her own business. She told me that working in a company she gets gives her regular payment. Besides, she could not make enough money when she had her own business because, according to her, income of her own business was fluctuating months to months every months.
In conclusion, I dare to say that it is it more beneficial to work in a company than to work as an by a individual. in terms of learning cooperation, resulting bigger profits and getting stable income. I would like you to recommend people who are wandering to find a job to get an interview at a big company because having their own business could only bring them devastating results such as selfishness. With Because of those three reasons, I strong believe working in a company is the best choice.
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