There are two ways to study, either studying in a group or studying alone. People who prefer to study in a group claims that it helps them to concentrate more and achieve goals faster as because they share common goals. However, I do not prefer to study in groups. It is actually a waste of time, since, in the end, studying should be done on one’s own. In this essay, I will focus on the advantages and disadvantages of studying in groups, and the reason why studying has to be done by a single person.
혼자 공부하는 것에 대해서 agree하시면 반대 option의 단점을 쓰는 것 보다는 찬성하는 option의 장점으로 써 주시는 게 좋아요.
Obviously, studying in a group is not totally bad. Students can get bored when studying alone, and they can fall into something else like such as playing games or web surfing. But group studying can prevent this. It also allows students to exchange study materials from the class and sample study questions that might be on the test. Therefore, it could be actually helpful in one way or the other.
다시 한번 말하지만 글쓴이님이 반대하는 의견에 대해서 긍정적으로 쓰시게 되면 글이 흐름을 잃어요. 1~2문장으로 쓰시는 건 괜찮지만 이렇게 body paragraph 하나를 전부 쓰시는 건 안 좋을 것 같아요. 이런 경우에는 studying alone이 왜 좋은지에 대해서만 쓰시는 게 좋습니다.
However, group studying is not always effective. With friends, the topic study could go off-topic, resulting in not studying at all. It would not be a problem if students are hard-working students, but even they could fall into the allure of darkness. For example, my studious friends, all studious students, and I were studying well in a small group, but after few days, we started to get loosened and went out eating to eat for 2 hours. Focusing on studying was impossible after that day.
Studying, especially when you want to reach to a certain level, it has to be done alone. If one’ is going to get an A+ in class, he must focus everything into that class and to study in depth. By all means, it studying requires a lot of time. and with When studying in a group, it is virtually impossible to put the time that is necessary. For example, in order to be good at math, you must first memorize the formulations formulas first. You could do that in a group study. However, then you must solve thousands of questions, which takes time and solving the problem could only be done alone. This applies to TOEFL, TOEIC, school classes, and etc. To be good at something, and that is what I want, eventually one have to study alone, eventually.
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In conclusion, although there are benefits of studying in a group, it is not preferable in my case. I pursue to be the best in one thing, and group studying never allows me to become one. To focus on something, time is what is needed, and I can do it by studying alone, not in a group. Studying is studying, not sports.
마지막 conclusion에 sports가 좀 뜬금없이 나오는 거 같기는 하지만 전체적으로 opinion전달도 잘 되었고 좋아요. 하지만 studying in a group의 장점을 쓴 paragraph는 빼주시는 게 더 좋을 거 같아요. 수고하셨습니다.