▶ Your Answer :
An
intriguing topic of discussion at hand is whether the successful development
of the country, the government
should spend more money on very young children (the age five to ten) than on
the university education for the successful development of the country. The answer to
this question can vary greatly depending on the individual perspectives. Thus,
the jury may still be out, but as far as I am concerned, I totally disagree
with the statement. In the essay, I will present two reasons supporting my
standpoint as follows.
To begin
with, to develop the country, the government should support professional
education. In other words, it is better for the government to spend more money on the university that teach students
technical subjects than very young people, especially at the age of five to ten/the age five to
ten. 1. The development of the country results from the development of the
specialization of area, such as economic, biology, physics, art, music and so
on. So the education of the university is more beneficial due to education
process focusing on the specialization. On the other hand, the education for
young children tries to search for children’s interest through
providing various classes.
1.
사실상 이 문장들은 이미 본론1, 두 번째 문장인 “In other words, the government spends more money on the university that
teach students technical subjects than very young people, especially at the age
of five to ten/the age five to ten” 에서 다 설명된 내용이라 해도 과언이
아닙니다. 두 번째 문장에서 쓰신 내용을 자세하게 더 긴 문장들로 풀어서 쓰는 것이 아니라 This is because university students are leading
power of the society in near future (대학생들은 당장에 사회를 이끌어 갈 사람들이기에 더 많은 투자로
양질의 교육을 제공해야한다) 등의 문장을 시작으로 첫 문장의 idea
를 expound 해주시면 좋겠습니다.
Furthermore,
many students who study in on the university suffer from high price
tuition. However, child education has been supported (much money) by the
government. According to the National Research Center of Korea, over 30 percent
of the students who study in on the university took out student loans from the
bank. And many people have even given give up even studying the
education due to the unaffordable /expensive tuition overpriced fees. Although the
university provides students with a chance of the scholarship, the chance is very
limited. Therefore if the government wants to develop the country, they should increase expend a possibility of
the education of university by funding a scholarship.
In
conclusion, I strongly argue for my standpoint on account of the two reasons
mentioned above. Once again, although the verdict may still be out, I
personally believe that two of my rationales are enough to represent the
viewpoint of a majority of people who are in favor of my claim. |