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There is a controversy about limited limiting opportunities of higher education. Some people claims that chance to take of higher education should be only offered for provided to students who show potential abilities. However, in my point of view, an opportunity of education has to be opened to all.
To begin with, people's right of education should be supported. everyone has right to pursue higher education for their lives and there is no one can limit the opportunity. (처음 두 문장의 큰 차이를 못느껴서 앞 문장을 지웠습니다. And the right of education should be protected because it will be a factor to develop society 이런 문장 정도 더 써주시면 좋을 것 같네요.) Even though a student lacks/ has no is lack of his academic skill, he could it is possible to find out his talent at school. What we should do is to try to make them opened to all subject at university to figure out what their potentials are. When we support them in struggling to developing their professional abilities, we all may reach to a new level of society. For example, one of my friend, who did was not make good result at high school, found his talent after entered college. He studied about his major very hard and finally(,) graduated from college summa cum laude from college.
On top of that, by allowing all students to receive higher education, we can improve industry. As more students develop their careers at college, more talented workers can demonstrate their abilities in the real business. In these days, a majority of tedious and simple works are already performed by various machines. What the society need is creative thinking abilities of highly educated people, and a college will be the best place to teach those things learn that. At my work, an architectural design company, the number of workers graduated universities, even graduated schools, is are (the number of~~~ 는 단수취급해줍니다! ^^) increasing. This indicates that industries nowadays need people with a great amount of knowledges. (이 문단 상당히 잘 쓰셨는데요, 좀 더 객관적인 자료를 제시해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 정확한 정보없이 단순히 우리 회사 직원들 중 대학과 대학원 졸업자가 많아지고 있다. 라고만 서술하시면 credible 한 정보는 아니지 않겠습니까? 따라서 과거와 비교를 해주신다던가 수치를 제시하신다던가 하는 방법으로 보충해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다~)
Lastly, higher education would make communication among people more effective it helps better communication of people. If we offer chances of higher education to limited group of students, social disharmony between people and classes will become more serious. As a result, it will negatively affect the development of society. When we provide chance to take higher education for all students to pursue higher education, discrimination based on academic background will disappear. Not only that, as people freely go to colleges, there would be no hindrance to communicate among people thanks to similar experience and level of knowledge communication between social members can be encouraged. Consequently, it will be a great energy to develop society improve our culture.
To sum up, allowing higher education to all students benefits the national industry and social communication. Also, it is important to support people's right of education to develop their abilities. In this regard, I firmly believe that university education should be opened to all students.
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