■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

▶ Your Answer :

It is no exaggeration to say that a variety of experiences enriches people’s lives because the experiences accumulated experience becomes their wisdom in their lives. By having many experiences, people become a wiser with respect to dealing with a variety of problems that they may encounter in their lives. (여기를 기준으로 앞과 뒤가 어떤 관련성이 있는지 의문입니다. 경험에 관련된 이야기를 하시다가 “high paying job 이야기로 넘어가시는 것이 일단은 자연스럽지 않은데다가 왜 however을 연결어로 쓰신 것인지 모르겠습니다.) However, it seems to be a controversial topic there seems to be a disagreement to as to whether it is better to work at a high-paying job with low security. Some people believe that it is better to work at a high-paying job with low security, while others believe otherwise. Regarding this predicament, I believe that it is clear to me that it is better to work at a high-paying job with low security because people who have a high-paying job can travel abroad many times(,) and they people can learn various specialized knowledge by having an opportunity can work in a variety of jobs.

è 글의 흐름 생각하시면서 정리하실 필요가 있는 Intro 입니다.

  One evident advantage people can expect to have by earning a lot of money and traveling abroad many times is a deep understanding of cultures of other countries. (자, 여기 문제가 있습니다. Intro 에서는 첫 이유가 뭐였습니까? 여러나라를 여행할 수 있는 것! 이 이유엽습니다. 그런데 이 문장에서는 더 나아가 earning a lot of money 와 traveling abroad many times 를 이미 전제하고 understanding of cultures of other countries 를 이야기하고 계십니다. Intro의 내용을 바꾸시던지 아니면 이번 문단의 내용을 정리하셔야 할 것 같습니다. 일단 앞의 두 문장이 이렇게 되어버려서 뒤의 내용 역시도 애매한 흐름으로 이어질 것 같네요. 이 다음 문장부터는 문법을 위주로 보겠습니다.) As people experience various countries’ ways of thinking, people can solve many problems more easily by watching a broader perspective on the problems. For example, there are two employees who are dealing with and one problem as to Japan. (ß 단순히 as to Japan 이 아니라 일본에서 어떤 문제가 있다던가 일본 사업가와의 계약문제라던가 구체적으로 언급해주세요.) An employee A a ‘A’ employee has a the experience (to visit Japan 을 말씀하시는 것 같군요.) while employee B and a ‘B’ employee have never traveled Japan does not have the experience that traveled to Japan. An employee A The A employee would be able to solve (would 는 100퍼센트의 sure 을 의미하지는 않습니다. 그런데 이건 예이지 않습니까? 예에서도 확실하지 못하면 신빙성 있는 주장이라고 볼 수 없죠.) the problem easily in a Japanese with a japanese perspective, while employee B the B employee would have be difficulty in solving difficult to solve the problem as least until the A employee solve the problem. (A 에 대해 말씀하실 때와 같은 문제가 있습니다.) It is not the only advantage that people can expect to have by having a high-paying job with low aecurity.(?)

  Without a doubt, people can learn diverse specialized knowledge(,) as people have an opportunity to can work in many jobs. The diverse specialized knowledge affords people to be able to find a different job without difficulty. People can enjoy their time without worry about time when they should find another job from ending the term of a contract of current job thanks to the knowledge. A research done by an American University clearly demonstrates that one of the most important things that employers are expecting to job seekers is their specialized knowledge is how many applicants have specialized knowledge when companies engage new workers. The research concludes that people who have a high- Paying Job with Low Security (왜 이렇게 단어의 첫 시작마다 대문자로 쓰셨는지 모르겠네요..) can enjoy their time without any worry because their diverse specialized knowledge help them find a new job. (연구결과도 처음 두, 세문장에서 이미 언급한 내용을 반복하셨습니다.)

People will be able to live a stable life by working with high job security. However, the advantages mentioned above, people who have a high-paying job can travel abroad(,) and can learn various specialized knowledge which would be helpful to be able to find another job are too significant to be ignored.

Specialized knowledge 를 쌓을 수 있기 때문에 돈 많이 주는 회사에서 일하는 것이 낫다라는 의견은 쉽게 이해가 되지는 않습니다. Body 2에서도 돈 많이 주는 회사에서 일하는 사람들이 어떻게 specialized knowledge 를 기르는지에 대한 구체적인 내용은 없습니다. 내용면에서 전반적인 수정이 필요합니다. 수고하셨습니다~