▶ Your Answer :
The lecture and reading passage hold different positions respectively, on the issue of buzzers. The lecture's argument is formed around many points that are in direct contrast to the materials in the reading passage.
First off, the reading passage suggests that customers tend to accept the opinion from the buzzer without suspicion. (why consumers do so? If it is provided in reading passage, please mention it.) However, the lecture rebuts this point by claiming that people do not easily believe the information provided by buzzers. The reason is that after gaining information from buzzers, people usually reviewed the information through the internet. For example, they are able to utilize other consumers' reviews.
Also, the reading passage claims that these paid advertisers frequently magnify the benefits of a product or brand because they are hired to promote positive characteristics and often have no practical experience with the product. On the other hand, the lecture refutes this point by claiming that buzzers are well aware of the features of products. This is attributed to the reason that companies hire customers who are originally loyal to their brands as buzzers. Therefore, buzzers are already well-informative about the benefits and drawbacks of products. (이번 문단은 잘 하셨습니다. 양쪽 입장의 대조되는 주장이 드러나있으며 각각의 주장을 뒷받침하는 근거까지도 잘 써주셨습니다.)
Lastly, the reading passage argues that buzz-building cultivates the trend of mistrust and deception among people. (왜 그런 trend 를 만든다고 reading은 주장하고 있는 걸까요? Reading 의 주장을 뒷받침해주는 내용이 제시되어 있을 것 같습니다.) In contrast, the lecture counters this point by claiming that buzzlers do not destroy/loose their destory trust. (애 not 보다는 신뢰를 잃지 않기 위해 노력한다는 표현을 써야 흐름상 더 좋을 것 같습니다.) This is because if products are bad, (상품이 나쁘면 그 상품을 판매하는 회사가 buzzlers를 구하기 어려워진다는 내용이죠? 이 의미가 충분히 전달될 수 있도록 the company~~~ 이런식으로 써주시는 것이 더 clear하게 의미를 전달할 수 있을 것 같습니다.) it is hard to recruit buzzlers. As a result, a majority of people are is likely going to be satisfied with products recommended by buzzlers. In addition, they will have a favorable view of taking information from others.
In conclusion, although althouth the reading passage presents three aspects with regard to the issue of buzzers, the lecture's argument makes it clear that none of these points justifies the reading passage's suggestion.
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