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There is a controversy about whether quick decision is right or wrong. Some people say that it is better to make a decision as quickly as possible. However, in my point of view, making a decision after thinking carefully/ careful thinking thought holds more advantages.
To begin with, careful decisions prevent possible mistakes. The best decision can be made based on consideration of various factors. If we try to make decisions in hurry to quickly, it is likely that we fail to notice various possible results. As each options may reach to different result, it is important to predict unexpected mistakes we might make. For example, when I was planning to travel to a beach with my friend, I just decided about my destination and did not pay attention about detail information about the beach. Unfortunately when we arrived there, we realized that the opening season of the beach already was ended. If I carefully checked about it, I was possible enough to prevent the mistake.
On top of that, we can do work make our work more efficiently by making decisions after deep consideration. (why do you think so? Body 1에서는 supportive sentence 가 주어졌는데 이번에는 그리 clear 하지 않습니다.) In order to maximize efficiency of a work, we need to think carefully before making a decision. (첫 문장의 의미와 비슷한데 표현만 조금 바꾸신 듯 하네요~) It is because we can save our money and effort by increasing efficiency. (시간을 절약하고 수고를 덜 하는 것 자체가 효율적인 일하기 입니다. 따라서 철저한 고민 끝에 내린 결정으로 인해 시간을 절약하고 수고를 덜 수 있다고 서술하시는 것이 맞겠습니다.) As careful deliberation prevents unnecessary trials and errors, careful thought about a decision benefits us in many ways. In case of architectural planning, even drawing a line can largely affect the real building. (구체적인 예시 있나요? 있다면 서술해주세요~) Thus, an architect consider all the possible alternatives when he designs a building. Therefore, it is possible to minimize the time consumption and money expenditure for the construction.
Lastly, making decisions after careful deliberation benefit our human relationship. If I make decisions carelessly, it may negatively affect my reputation. (reputation 이 있어야 관계를 잘 할 수 있다는 내용의 글이 아니라면 supportive sentence 의 방향을 조금 바꾸실 필요가 있습니다.) As we tend to trust a person who act with prudence, making a decision after deeply considering about it could give good impression to others benefit our personal impression to others. Thus, if we have an attitude that always tries to make decisions carefully, it will be a great help to our human network. (역시나 reputation 보다는 신뢰감을 준다 등의 문장이 나을 것 같구요. 구체적인 내용도 다듬어주시면 좋겠습니다.)
To sum up, it is important to make a decision carefully in order to not only prevent mistakes, but also make our human relationships better. In this regard, I firmly believe that it is not good to make a decision quickly people make quick decisions are wrong.
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