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People nowadays seem to agree, to some degree/extends, that quick decision making skills are vital for their success, as they the world around them changes very quickly. They often argue that making decisions quickly enable them to capitalize on opportunities. However, a closer examination of on their claims reveals that decisions made in a hurry often cause more problems than they solve: hasty decisions can cause unforeseen problems and decisions once made are irreversible.
Hasty decisions can cause numerous unforeseen problems in the future. Without the benefit of planning, people are more likely to make uninformed decisions. (unforeseen problems 을 만들게 되는 이유는 “정보가 부족한 상태”에서 결정을 내리기 때문이라는 뜻이죠? 이렇게 첫 문장과 supportive sentence 는 잘 만들어주셨습니다!) Their decisions may appear to be reasonable in terms of few years when, in reality, they may cause serious issues in the long-run. To be specific, our family suffered a huge financial loss precisely because of an uninformed decision made by my father. Ten years ago, when my parents were looking for an apartment, an employee from a well-established real-estate agency persuaded my dad to buy an apartment. The employee lured him into buying the apartment by offering exclusive deals, such as a twenty percent discount. He threatened my father that it will be sold to someone else if he does not hurry. As a result, he purchased the apartment immediately without consulting others. We all thought that he made the right decision until we tried to sell our apartment to move into a new house a decade later. We discovered that it's its 의 소유격을 만드시는 거라면 –s를 붙이시면 됩니다> price took a nose dive shortly after purchasing it: it's its price was almost halved in less than a year. As we can see, hasty decisions can cause numerous problems in the long-run.
Apart from numerous problems they can cause, hasty decisions are also irreversible once they are made. (두번째 근거가 “되돌릴 수 없기 때문에 hasty decisions 을 부정적으로 생각하시는건가요? 신중하게 내린 결론도 irreversible 하지 않을까요? 또한 supportive sentence도 없어보입니다.) Decisions affect our lives permanently. In other words, wrong decisions can leave permanent scars on our lives. This is why decisions made in a hurry without careful planning can be harmful. In addition, it is almost impossible to undo our decisions once they are made. For example, my friend, Bill, bought a very expensive two-seater sports car, Lexus, since he fell in love with sports car (이런 식으로 표현 정리해도 괜찮겠습니다~) /out of his love for sports car in his late twenties. Little did he know that he would get married a year later and have a baby. As he was paying for his car on the installment plan for/ in installments over five years, he could not afford to buy another car suitable for a family of three. His marriage was ruined for he and his wife would argue about his car all the time. His impulsive decision to buy a two-seater resulted in an undo-able nightmare. In this sense, decisions have to be made very carefully as they are irreversible.
To conclude, not only are hasty decisions harmful, but also they are irreversible. In this regard, I feel that it is always wrong to make decisions in a hurry. Hasty decisions will cause many people to waste their time and money. People should be careful not to make decisions too quickly.
표현력도 좋으시고 잘 쓰셨는데요~ 두 번째 문단에서 supportive sentence 까지도 잘 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다! |