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I think group study is more effective than individual study. I have three reasons for my opinion. <에세이를 쓰실 때는 인트로가 제일 중요합니다. 좀 더 구체적으로 써주세요 ^^>
First, much information could be shared. If one can’t resolve the problem, they would ask for help. Mostly/Most of the time, problem is can be resolved through by the members of group. In this cycle, they get the information and give the information <결과적으로 get하고 give 하는 게 정보(information)이기 때문에 the information이 두 동사 뒤에 나와야 합니다> that they know for question. This process increases learning efficiency.
Second, this study method has a emphasizes responsibility from every member of the group. 는 상황에 맞지 않는 것 같습니다. 강조하다 (emphasize) 라는 단어를 사용해서 문장을 더 부드럽게 만들었습니다> In every meeting, they have a an assignment. As a member of group, they have each has to do the assigned things/task. If they don’t do their homework, <don’t는 문장을 부정문으로 만드는 역할을 하지, ‘하다’라는 의미가 아닙니다. 그렇기 때문에 do를 넣어주셔야 합니다 ^^> it is hard to proceed with the plans in of the group. Therefore, each other everyone has a strong responsibility for to participate to in the group.
Third, they are motivated through by each other. Clearly, they have a different level to with the same study. In this case, each member recognizes their standard level. This perceiving could be a great guideline. Once they know their level in a group, they make plans which to resolve the gap between with other member.
To sum up, I believe that group study is a great help to study because members of group give various tips to of proper study way. In this regard, my opinion is that group study is better than individual study.
전반적으로 본인의 근거와 그를 보충해주는 문장 (supportive sentence)가 clear 하게 드러나지 않으니 글을 구성하실 때 신경써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다! 실수를 많이 하신 부분이 전치사입니다. 상황과 뜻에 맞게 전치사를 선택해서 넣어주시면 좋을 것 같네요. 수고하세요 ^^ |