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Modern society's students get more and more challenging tasks and requirement from their schools as they need a lot of knowledge to be competitive person in modern society. Therefore, it is great worth to discuss whether students should ask help about their school work to their friend who has much information on the task or professional tutor. Although some people think that students need to ask help to the professional tutors as they can professionally teach students, I think asking help to friend who has much information about the tasks brings several advantages to students. In this essay, I will dearly show and develop what I think and why I think this way.
First of all, students can become independent with help of friends by debating and ruminating to understand and complete the given tasks. (왜요? 왜 independent 할 수 있다고 하시는 건가요? 그 이유를 간략하게 설명해주세요~) Generally speaking, if students get help from their friend, they discuss, research and try to understand the tasks completely by themselves since they need brief understanding to complete the tasks perfectly. Tutor 는 하나부터 열까지 다 해주지만 친구에게 부탁했을 경우는 능동적인 참여가 필요함을 강조해주면 좋겠네요~ Therefore, students should ask help from their friends rather than tutor who can offer all information that needed to complete the school tasks without any students' effort. Here is my friend's experience to illustrate the point. My friend, Sarah, got constant tutoring as her tutor analyzed the tasks briefly to help her to complete the school tasks with high grade. However, when she became senior, she could not get help from her tutor anymore since that research should be strictly done by her. As she did not ever try to complete given tasks before, she got confused and could not understand the tasks and should have to postpone the graduation. If she has gotten help from her friends and completed the tasks by herself, she would graduate on time. (친구들에게 물어볼 경우에는 independent 하게 배울 수 있는데 구체적으로 어떤 방식으로 그렇게 될 수 있는지에 대한 언급이나 예가 없습니다.) 예시 다음에는 그 예시와 본인의 idea 의 관련성을 밝혀주시고 글 끝맺음 하시는 것이 좋습니다.
Secondly, students can get help from their friends without any financial burden since friends do not ask any financial reward over their help. (왜죠? 친구들끼리는 돈이라는 보수가 없어도 충분히 도와줄 수 있다 등의 이유가 있을 수 있겠죠?) In general, modern day’s students should have to pay high amount of money to get tutoring from professional tutor because of the society’s demand for high quality education and professional tutor. Therefore, it is better for students to get help from their friends who are willing to teach their friends without any financial rewards since they can concentrate only in study without doing part-time job to get tutoring from professional tutor. Here is a trust worthy research to clarify the point. According to the KRI, the most famous research institution in Korea, 70 percent of universities students are suffering from financial burden and shouldering it by doing part time jobs. This research demonstrates how helpful friends are in lessening financial burden and concentrating more on studying.
In conclusion, I think students should ask help about their school tasks to their friends rather than professional tutor. This is not only because they can be independent on doing the school work but also because it would ease students’ student’s financial burden and help them concentrate solely on studying better. Therefore, I would suggest students to get advice from their friends on doing their school work.
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