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A vast variety of books have been published since printing technique emerged. It is generally said that books can affect people in terms of their perspectives or attitudes. On the other hand, television has had power in our society since it was invented in the 1930’s. Today, there are arguments whether the book is more powerful for society or not. Some people might think that books are more powerful, so they can affect society well. However, I firmly believe that television has more influence on the world for two reasons. First, most people spend much time watching television rather than reading books. In addition, television plays more roles than books do in society. Topoic 과 relevant 한 내용을 시작으로 인트로를 잘 이끌어 오신 것 같습니다!
To begin with, books do not have influence anymore in that many people are no longer read books. 동사와 일반동사는 같이 갈 수 없습니다> (where is your supportive sentence?) Although e-book, which is considered convenient and light-weighted, has becomes become popular all over the world, people rather tend to watch television. To be specific, when I get on the bus or subway, I see often people watching television by using their smart phones or tablets such as I-pad. Furthermore, you even discover that Koreans even watch television on their phones, walking along the street. According to recent research conducted by The Korean Times, ninety-two percent of people said that they watched television more than reading a book or e-book when they were on the public transportation to go to work or school. They also added that they are considerably subjected to watch TV rather than reading any book in their pastime. Therefore, it is attributed to the fact that books are less influential in society than television because modern people spend more time watching television.
The second reason that is usually observed is that television plays a significant role on society in that television informs people of recent news and beneficial information about everything such as political occasions or domestic events at any time. It is said that television gives us 24/7 information of society we should be aware of. For instance, a few months ago, there was a strong earthquake, which occurs infrequently in Korea where an earthquake is less popular. 라는 단어가 이 문장에 어울리지 않는 것 같네요. 수정된 부분 확인해주세요> At that time, on television, announcers on any broadcast noticed that the signal of earthquake was detected. On that day, most of the people who watched television mainly did not go out and went to the basement for safety. As a result, people could be prepared for disaster, and there was relatively few damage. Thus, I strongly believe that television has more mighty impact on society in that television is a useful source, offering up-to-date news. 상대적으로 책은 recent 한 정보를 즉각적으로 반영할 수 없다는 단점을 brief 하게 비교설명하셔도 좋을 것 같습니다.
In conclusion, in the twenty first century, television has more powerful effects on society than books in two aspects. People are willing to spend much time watching television when they are on the public transportation using largely smart phones or when they have pastime. In addition, television is more influential in society since it offers recent news people should know at any time.
전반적으로 의미 전달을 참 잘 하셨습니다. 문법적인 부분도 크게 흠 잡을 부분은 없구요~ supportive sentence 만 clear 하게 써주시면 좋을 것 같네요. 수고하셨습니다~ |