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Many people get information from watching
the news NEWS. However, is
getting information on the Internet or newspaper, because they is easier . to find information online
and choose which information By using the internet, people are able to choose the specific
information they need which they cannot do while watching news on t.v.
they want to know.
First of all, information is easier to
find on the Internet or in newspapers since both
The Internet and newspaper can be found
in around the world, Therfore it is easy to find
information.
For example, when I watch the news, it
tells only about Las Vegas. However, newspapers provide information about the world. Moreover, by using the Internet people can
get information not only about Las Vegas but others like news updates from
Korea, situation in Europe and popstars in Brazil. The Internet also provides more information. In Las vegas,
news on TV only talk about
Las vegas. In the other hand I
can find information about the things outside of Las vegas news on korea or
the situation in Europ,
popstars Brazil. People can readly to find information.
In addition to easy access to information using to find on the internet, people can also choose which information
they want to know.
Even though there are many news channels,
they all talk about the same information. People can not choose different
information while
watching television.
For instance, When KJI died, all the news stations gave the same information. However It was the same.
They did not provide more details because all the details were the same. The
internet and newspapers contain many different contents. Therefore,
they can provide more details
for the people to read.
The networks talked about KJI's death.
However the Internet and newspapers also mentioned
where he died. How he died and people's opinions about his deathhe is died. people can get various informations.
To conclude, even though people watch the news, it is easier to find information online or in the
newspapers.
People can also choose information on the
internet or in the newspapers better than watching TV.
IT is clear to see that the
internet and newspapers are better than watching the news
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